Proofread: Has the writer proofread to eliminate all errors? Do the sentences all make sense? Is the correct tense used throughout the writing?
No. A number of spelling and preposition errors. Some faults in sentence construction.
Justification: Does the writer justify their ideas on how to improve girls’ education in Afghanistan? Are their reasons valid?
Points are not very well justified. Feasibility and actual effectiveness of ideas in question.
Feedback: What has the writer done well?
Seems to empathize well with the educational situation in another country and has considered to some extent how Singapore could employ her additional resources to help.
Feed forward: What does the writer need to work on next time?
Think through her ideas a little more before suggesting them.
Think through her ideas a little more before suggesting them.
